YAY IT IS FIXED. It really needed that off-balance feel at the end; I thought I had it in my very first draft, but that was because I could fill in all the other missing stuff in my head. Until I learn to psychically imprint my brainwaves on the masses, I'll have to settle for writing stuff down.
Thank you so much for the rec! I've read that zoicite fic before, and it's really good; I'll have to check out the nam_jai story after I finish working today (ugh).
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on 2009-03-07 04:51 pm (UTC)Thank you so much for the rec! I've read that